Review: The Hidden World: Book One by Schuyler J. Ebersol

17318124The Hidden World: Book One
Schuyler J. Ebersol
 Koehler Books December 1, 2013 
Pages 278
ISBN13: 9781938467677
A copy was provided in exchange for an honest review

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Nate Williams is found wandering alone in the woods at the age of six. Raised by a wealthy and loving family, he suffers a heart attack at the age of seventeen, triggering profound changes that allow him to unlock his full mental potential and transform into a wolf. Nate is sent to Noble College, where changing into an animal is normal and students are taught to do extraordinary things, such as alter the weather and change wood into diamond.

When a series of murders around the country threaten the secrecy of the Hidden World, Nate realizes there is more going on at Noble than meets the eye. He and his friends take it upon themselves to figure out what is going on and bring the killers to justice.

I’m still getting my feet wet with fantasy/paranormal,YA genres. I’m not exactly an advanced reader of this books particular genre or part of the target audience, keep this in mind when reading my review.

An enthusiastic effort on Ebersol’s part in writing his first novel. I’m sure this will appeal to a younger crowd and/or fans of fantasy/paranormal/YA reads, for me I felt lukewarm at best towards Ebersol’s effort.

I realize this is purely a work of fiction, however the entire narrative lacked plausibility. Elements throughout the story were a little too ‘fantasy’ driven to be remotely possible, even the characters where out of place.

The pacing was off which could lead to the plausibility factor lacking. The characters were too ‘perfect’ and you felt zero empathy towards them. Not enough dissension when certain aspects were revealed, once again contributing to the unbelievable factor. Too much agreeability within characters and subjects interjected, need a large dose of strife to spice it up.

Females are portrayed horribly, a major turn off to me. The fact all these kids are abundantly privileged grates on your nerves after a while, not causing any form of endearment. You ask yourself – What do these spoiled brats know about life? Issues? Not having? It’s almost comical. Their biggest decision thus far in there few years on earth – Ferrari or Maserati for Christmas. Dialog could use fine tuning, the language used was stiff at best and too formulaic for my taste, felt overly contrived.

The writing is average, however that could be improved upon with more writing, coaching and good old fashioned editing. Predictability was heavy.

The story is all too familiar, with uber spoiled rich kids as the focus living in a ‘fantasy’ world (no pun attended) with no appeal. Great first effort, courageous and I believe the next book in the series will be improved upon by Ebersol’s green experience with this debut narrative.

A majority of readers of this particular genre, especially the YA fans, will enjoy this book very much, for me it leaned towards simply not being my cup of tea and in need of strong editing. I’m not anywhere near being a part of the YA group, more MA (mature audience) no doubt this bears a portion of the weight of it not suitable to my palette.

2 stars


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